interesting
hey not bad chapters could be longer but all in all not bad
Hm, more of a prologue than a chapter, but nice. Just a bit of advice, try setting out the fic a little differently. If you start a new line everytime a new idea is introduced it will make it easier to read. Anyways, interesting story.
Its a bit too short, but quite nice. cant wait till the next chapter is online
That can be a really good story! PLZ do more!
Really short. And you need to use correct poncuation and Grammer. Other then that I liked it . I'll vote untill chapter 2 comes out and see if you took my advice.
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