Actually the errors are more of a mispelling nature, or tipoes, but here they are anyway. Chap 1: "Nobody ever kept them self this closed up..." should be "Nobody ever kept themselves this closed up..." "Where you going, Faker?" It's ok, but it sound better if you put it this way "Where are you going, Faker?" "and destroy of it." take away the 'of' "before stumbling out of the alley way" 1 - alley or... 2 - alleyway Chapter 2: "How does the do that?" the -> he
Author's Response: Oh jeeze. XD I'm sorry. That's what I get for posting things at 4am. Thank you! -- and, actually, I kept the 'Where you going' purposely like that, as Sonic's english voice actor tends to use that sort of slang with his speech.
:thud: :thud: :thud: sorry, inadequecy hurts... But I really do love this story. Shadow so self assured, and he's outsmarting Sonic at every turn. Poor guy. Needle mouse indeed. :P Anyways, super congrats on the story... i should go back to work on BnK too.... ;; vv;; :thud:
;_; damn... feeling inadequate again... that is your first?! very nice story. i love the characters. sonics got a one track mind... keep writing. ^_^ :thumbs up:
Author's Response: Don't feel this way! ;_; I love your stories, too.
A good start, I tell you. A good start. Only, you should keep an eye open for a few major errors. O hope to see the second chapter soon.
Author's Response: Errors? ^^ Please tell me, so that I can fix them. x.x; I was writing this at 4am. Was it rambling?
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