Hey, let me fill you in on something here, the world won't end if you don't update, don't demand reviews, that takes away the whole point of them.
Also, you're story needs a good bit of work, for instence, things arn't exsplained very well, you need more detail.
And the only real emotion I'm getting is anger, unless thats the point, you might want to work on that.
Your story's not BAD by any means, it just needs work...
Basicaly, add more detail to your story, and it should turn out alright.
Good luck...

Author's Response: Number one: You think I don't know that? Number two: I'm not demanding. I just unloved...okay. Yes, I'm demanding. Doesn't mean you /have/ to, however. Number three: Ignoring the one before this, yes. The only emotion, for now, is anger. There will be fluff soon... I know it needs work. No story's perfect. I can't believe I'm saying this, but, not even "A Matter of Trust" is perfect. And that's like a friggin' novel.

nice hope that the 5th chap comming soon

Author's Response: Yup! Next weekend! ...or maybe longer...

you use 'Feh' too much.. other then that, it doesn't suck!! It's great! your an awesome writer who THINKS they suck... So come on.. give yourself more credit! ^^ Can't wait till you post more!

Author's Response: I see...and last time I think you were questioning my abilities? You mentioned Sonic X, so I just thought... Thanks, though! I'll try to tell my beta reader to stop trying to convince me to use 'Feh' in every other mother-freaking sentence. -_-

Reviewing myself is fun! In fact, I never thought I would EVER even MAKE a fanfiction! Now look! Two...now three...reviews in under two days! SAWEEEEEET!!!

Author's Response: Now to wait for more reviews...

NOO!!! SONIC!!! (more of a shadow fan.. ^ ^)

this is your first story? It's great!!! I REALLY can't wait for more!! ^ ^

Author's Response: Damn! Reviews come quick! Actually it's almost identical to a roleplay with a friend.