ooh juicy part lol, update soon, your story is one heck twisted at the right part, great job!
omg what a cliffy awww.
When are you gonna update T_T
gaaaaa OMFG!
please more! *w* i love it!
Hm... Nice story, and good beginning of a lemon scene. Hart is heart though and when ya wrote gentile, I think you meant gentle. Like where it's going. ^^
Author's Response: *nods* yep I did ^^
Yah. I agree.
oooo interesting
.... Uhhh...
O..K? It seems interesting.. But.. Who's Ace?
Heh.. I hate getting criticism and I can't beleive I'm about to dish it out. -.-''
Ok.. Um.. Try to be a little more descriptive.. Like, what Ace looks like or what the little girl looks like.. Stuff like that.
Can you put it into Paragraphs? It would make everything easier to read.
And finally, just watch you're grammer a little. I noticed you didn't capitalize the begining of sentences or their names.
Well, anyway.. I can't wait for the next chapter!!!! WHAT'S ON HER NECKLACE?!?! I NEED TO KNOWWW!! *Cries* (This is my normal type of review.. hehe)
Author's Response: thanks so much for your opinion I aprecate it alot ^^ ace dosn't last long in the story so she dosn't need a realy graphic explanation it was kindof a rushed story. I'll try to put it into paragraphs, I didn't have time to capitalize every word ...IT TAKES TOOOOO LONG!! I draw as well I'm not super woman ¬¬ but thanks for the review I'm afraid you don't find out what the necklace is untill one of the end chapters and thats a long way away =p
Ohhh, another story! Great! I love you art and now your stories!!
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