The changing in point of view take away from the story. You should write in third person if you are going to attempt something like that.

Aw, unrequited love.... Nice experiment so far. Please continue. This is indeed a good read. If you get farther, I might add this to my favorites. ^^ I enjoyed how the POVs changed in the same sitiuation, getting a good idea what the other felt.

I don’t know what I think about this story yet, but please, write another chapter. This looks interesting! ^ ^