AWESOME! keep it up IM SSTILLLL LOVING THIS FIC!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Can you update like.......not three months later? :-/...........Lol no jk I'm patient.....Unlike some of these other people down there! :D


Author's Response: I try to update but with life still being there and all it's unpredictable and sometimes makes me venture away from my pc lol Hey at least I try.. maybe unsuccessfully but that's besides the point.

Can you update again!?
Pleeeeeeeeeeeze! I really really REALLY want to see what happens now! xDDDDD

Author's Response: lol i getting there i getting there

Heck no your story Isin't too long! I love long storys especially when their as good as yours!!!!!!!! Idk who told you that but their crazy 0_o thier jealous cause they can't ever make a story like you do! Anywhoooooooooooo...........This chapter was long and HOT! I loved what they did in the car OOOOWWWEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEE!!!!!!!!!!! I hope sonic dosen't fall In love with kat :( and I feel bad for sonic for raping him for getting raped by his enemy! ON THE DAY HE FOUND OUT HIS PARENTS WERE DEAD!!!! YOU EVIL PERSON! haha jk It's good to have some evilness In love storys! But ya your story Is definatly NOT too long... heck my lazy ass Is way too lazy to even right 2 paragraphs ! 0O and look how far you've come hopefully I might make my own In the future and make a story as good and long as yours. I'm the type that starts a story and once I hit 30 I give up! *my lazy self* anyways kudos to you! I can't wait for the next chappie ^_^


Author's Response: lol well thank ya, and your not lazy, just laid back lol and evil yes, yes i am but what is odd tho is that I believe in sharing the love. this story u don't see it as much but lik if i make up my own charracters its lik they fal in love their friends fall in love their enemies fall in love -snickers- sadly i get way over my head with rp's lik that and end up either breaking them up or just forgetting them, that or something where i don't have to constantly use them. That's a diff story tho -winks-

Uh, hon, this story could use some grammar work here and well, you should put periods on all of your sentences should have periods at the end. You're also lacking in commas, for instance; when a character is talking; "I don't know," huffed Shadow. | When separating thoughts from each other; If only, just if only, he could answer right away, it would release so much pent up stress off his shoulders, if only. |
Description needs more detail, the story is starting to bore me, and the characters are getting ... out of character. You're using too much pausing with the little dots representing hesitance in the speaking. Maybe you should go for a; "But..." he paused. After a few moments, he slowly shifted his head up, looking into those red ovals that drilled two, massive holes into his head. Eventually, he continued. "Why must it? Now of all times?" | (yes the sentences are long but I'm trying to make a point here) Something like that. It'd be nice to see some better grammar here.

An honest critique.
-Ceres

Author's Response: i keep these things in mind but do me a favor and keep this in mind.. It's an Rp from a long time ago. AKA I wasn't as good as I am now (hopefully I'm better lol) and I wasn't the only one typing. I do know that the characters tend to get a little out of character but sometimes it's hard to stay in character for as long as this story is. I also would like to add that truly they are humans so it's not the normal personality of Sonic or Shadow. If they were hedgehog's then I would be so agreeing more with that. I also will deffend my rp partner Teddy tho we aren't as good of friends ne more (we don't talk she stabbed me in the bac and stuff lik that ) She is a great writer (She writes for Sonic) She sometimes got a little out of control and emotional (which on her behave I sucked at writing parts like that so if it suck blame me. Again tho I do thanks you I will keep that in mind tho in reality No One Soul Is Perfect

I was almost genuinly sad at the beginning until it went to a happier mood. I really hope for an even happier ture ending, not to corny though, I've seen too many movies with corny happy endings. I lvoe this story though, it seems realistic but unrealistic at the same time.

Author's Response: ... heh... Well it all depends on ur deffinition of corny.. some corny is good when others is bad.. either way i know this story has a... unique... ending