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that was cute and sweet! plz keep this going!

OMFG MORE!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

"What a fool He was referring to the fox he sent into the mansion.

Flashback---" (BunnyFromHell).
Nope! This is simply bad form. I know this is a different style, but for reference, I would have done something more like:
The hedgehog contemplated the complete foolishness of the fox he sent to the mansion. The thoughts of his actions made him recall speaking with the fox before the fox entered.

After that, go into the story. For one, it flows better. Secondly, it eliminates the big sign, "Flashback" which completely halts the reader forcing them to get back into the reading. This will cause a lack of interest. Honestly, I don't even like most writer's using a "*****" line to separate two scenes because of an obvious event occurring. (For example, taking a trip from A to B may be separated with a line of *) However, many writers abuse it, so I discourage it all together. There is slight character development but a rather uneven flow in your writing. Attempt to write in a style and concern with opening only to one audience, in this case, romantic audience is who you are dealing with. So, use cliffhangers *A big plus for using one* but more so, focus the story on a relationship and something/someone preventing that from happening. Or, use the modern technique of extreme angst with one of the two characters in order to foil to the perfect world of the other. However, the one with problems cannot reveal them, as they are ashamed.
As for this story, it has progressed, development, introduction of a new character, and generally your ideas on a page. Next time, reread your work and think about it heavily before posting it. Check for errors, and comb to see if you can perfectly understand, without previously knowing, what is going on according to the text. Since this is much better than you last one, I give you are 7/10 for this one, simply because of comparision.
9/10
45%

Author's Response: Oh noes!! Another critic!! T_T First I had to improve to get critics from Takashi, now I have to get you to stop giving me critics. Personally, I don't like critics but instead of running to my room and crying, I improve to get rid of them.

Author's Response: Sorry. I messed up. I had to improve to STOP Takashi from giving critics.