I remember reading this story, just not what it was about. I only reread the first chapter and realize that this isn't my kind of story anymore. D: I suppose alot changes in 11 months, especially when you're a 15 year old.
Sorry...
Author's Response: its alright. morale drops after a while. this isn't personally my favorite anyway.
Maybe G.H.O.S.T. could help me with finding my lost memories. no i didnt get amnesia i just have a terrible memory, one time i forgot my own name, a lot of times i forget what i just said.
NOW THE MOST IMPORTANT THING IS: CONTINUETHISSTORYBECAUSEITISSOGREAT!!!!!!! Hello is Shadow right?
Author's Response: i would if i wasn't in writer's block... i don't understand your review, but okay. *stamped* APPROVED!
Nelson! Nelson! I like that name. It makes me laugh. But...not what happened and what Nelson attempted to do. The bit about the G.H.O.S.T. is interesting. I greatly enjoyed this chapter. :)
Author's Response: i was afraid it was a bit too religious. thanks. :) nelson is actually the last name f my friend, jacob nelson. lol i worked out the G.H.O.S.T. part as i wrote it. it was certainly not easily and asked my sis for brainstorming only to find myself doing it by myself. :( *stamped* APPROVED
Wow,
Pretty original idea you have there. Cant wait for the next instalmant!
Oh, and racist amy? Brilliant idea!
Author's Response: haha. Thanks for the review. I'm still trying to get a hang on the storyline because I am changing it alot.
Author's Response: Oops! I forgot! *stamped* Approved!
AMY! RACIST! GOSH! lol
Author's Response: lol i know! *stamped* approved!
I love how Hello talks. I just love it! :D And your description of the spagetti was the best food description ever. Honestly, I love how you compare it to coagulated blood and carbohydrate bonds. How Hello just evades Sonic then tries to convince him of companionship out of pity is rather amusing and despairing at the same time. I like. >:3 And, ooh, return of racist Amy! She's like something you just love to hate, like bubonic plague. Any who, a very good chapter over all. I didn't really see any errors save for a slight rush at the end, but that's to be expected. Awesome chap, and I'm glad to read it again. ^^ You rock.
Author's Response: hahaha! Omg and i love your honest reviews! thankyou, Rock on Takashi! *stamped* approved!
But other than that, its a pretty good story so far. :)
Author's Response: :D yay! *stamped* Short, but approved!
Umm... I think there's a mistake. You wrote "Shadow" instead of "Hello" in the beginning of the 2nd to last paragraph... :S
Author's Response: I noticed that. Oops. *stamped* approved
Author's Response: I think I fixed it now.
ah kind of confuseing but go on.
Author's Response: im reducing the weird stuff.
Author's Response: i also fixed some dialog and spelling.
Your story can be used as toiletpaper. It's horrible!
Author's Response: Well, toilet paper is useful.
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