rouge hates a restraurant.....must....not be fancy with all people wearing something expensive enough for rouge to...uh....'borrow'.

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'It was nice and bright outside.' 'Nice' has several synonyms and if you care to look them up, they're in any dictionary you just so happen to pass.
Not to mention 'Everything was perfect and nice.' is a rather repetitive phrase that I wouldn't choose, despite the fact that repetition could be used, but not like this.

'Shadow had walked into the darkness and walked under some trees and over logs. Shadow went further and further until he got tired. Shadow looked front/back, left/right and found himself lost. Shadow was getting worried that he might not get out of the forest. Shadow thought about the Chaos Emerald but just remembered that he had left it in his bedroom. Shadow stood there for about couple of minutes until he heard the noise again. Shadow found that what noise was familiar, like a sound he had heard before. Shadow heard that the sound was getting close and close until it was near his ear.' Well, it's okay, except EVERY SINGLE SENTENCE STARTED WITH SHADOW! Argh. Apologies, but that part was a living nightmare. O_O Worst name repeating I've ever seen on this site. *hands you a badge* I hope you're proud. Bleh. >< Watch out for that, dear author.

'(his head was hit so hard that he couldn't get up)' You could include this in narration without the parentheses. And "that you was killed" is grammatically incorrect.
Overall? Your spelling was atrocious. The descriptions weren't the best, but sort of okay. You repeated the names so much I thought I was getting dizzy. (Don't ask.)
So I'll try an example of one of yer paragraphs, just so ya get the point even better. How about the 'Shadow' every sentence one?

Here: Shadow had walked into the cool fringes of the awaiting darkness below. During his decent he stumbled over a few logs and roots from time to time, consequentially due to the lack of light. He went further and further into the foreboding area, until he felt a mild case of weariness. The ebon Life Form looked from his left to his right, viewing overshadowing trees, branches spread like a wretched envelope of death amongst the place. Ruby eyes next surveyed the areas above and below his feet which lead to the view of the canopy and the muddy ground. He had just noticed he knew not of where he was. Worried, Shadow wondered if he could make it out of this dense labyrinth [maze]. His thoughts wandered to the Chaos Emerald, but that was left idle in his bedroom. The hedgehog stood there until he heard the noise once more. The sound was familiar, like a sound he was heard before.... It was getting closer and closer until it was near his right ear....

I hope I helped somehow and keep the story up. ^^

Okay, overall, these last three chapters have had zero spelling errors, save homophones, and a ton of grammatical ones. So, go to my profile, send me an email with whatever your next chapter is before posting it, I will check it for errors and general conflict. I will send it back with my suggested corrections, you will correct what you agree with, and then post. This is called "Betaing" (I use that term loosely) or "editing." This will improve your stories and up your positive review port. Over all, I give the entire story a 4/10. Why?
3/5 for general idea/content. You lose two points for no psychological depth and a non existent story depth. (It is "skin deep") *Note, smut is graded purely on correctness/plausibility and general fappability* You get a 1/5 for grammar, spelling, readability, compactness, and flow. Here, you managed to obtain spelling, and you almost had compactness except there is a lot of loose ends in this story. Not enough details or explanations. If you need any help, feel free to ask. I am not really bashing, I just seem to be doing that because...well... it is fun to do. Not bad for a first story attempt, but not great better. You can do better if you try. However, you have to at least try!
Current grade: 40%

Author's Response: Thanks for the advice. I'll give you my idea as soon as I write it. I'm really bad at grammer and I had a habit in that.

"2 years had passed since Sonic and Shadow were first together with out having any problems. No one else knows about their relationship. Not even Amy. Sonic was afraid of what his friends would say if they found out that he was gay" (Shadow Rockstar).
No, no, no nononononononononono NO!!!!
Never start a story with a little back story like this. ILLUSTRATE A BACK STORY! Or, introduce it as PART of the story. The resulting improvements:
*Longer chapters.
*Less choppy structure due to integration. more sophisticated presentation of story.
*I don't come and rape you in your sleep. (Well, I won't, but I might *evil grin*)
*The back story pratically screams: "Hey, I am the entire plot, right here! No surprises except a few predictable cliff hangers."
If your chapters become predictable, no one will keep reading it after a few chapters....well, on other sites anyway. But Shadow will cut you short, and you are doing something right to catch her attention. *Or you HAD done something right, and she yells at you for screwing up.*
Final complaint for chapter:
"Soon the two hedgehogs had the date planned and went to get their outfits ready" (Shadow Rockstar). Okay, to disect Soon would need a comma, but in this case, it doesn't make since. So scratch it. Sonic and Shadow, by the way, don't really wear outfits, so if you are going to say that they are going to dress up, some sort of clothing should be mention before bringing in this random element. The only reason we ever see Sonic dressed up is because he is undercover or in that space suit for SA 2. That is about it, excluding gear. So, more details, better transition and flow. DO NOT GIVE OUT WHOLE PLOT IN A CHAPTER.
Finally, add some mental processing of either a psychological understanding or another way of sending the feelings of the characters to the reader. In writing any story, the audience must be the top priority, above the story itself, because the story is steered toward the audience. Therefore, write the story around the limited audience of this site, in this case. If the audience is different, appeal to them. And most audience prefer to understand motives and such, unless it is pointless smut. In which case, take out almost all plot, and make it a pure pointless smut.

Author's Response: Thanks. I had little time so I wantedto put something. I'm not good at making stories because of my ideas and my bad grammer problems. Maybe you can help me out here.