Rating: 1/5 *groans* YOUR SKIPPING EVEN MORE NOW! Not to mention.... 'By the Sonic woke up, Shadow was already gone.' Check for these mistakes. Can you?

Any who, your characters enter at random intervals, and it makes no sense.

You have too little description and too much dialogue. DESCRIBE Sonic's search for Shadow. You tend to make everything within their reach.

Not for SPELLING. Ahem, I do BELIEVE it makes you sound more intelligent when you REFRAIN from things like 'my feelings for u r real'. Does not it sound sort of...moronic? Yes? Continue? I shall. Spelling of 'assult', class? a-s-s-a-u-l-t Assault. Good.

Now, length. Any idea how long it typically takes authors to make a chap? Usually, weeks. I even have a chapter I've been working on for two months. This is something I could have wiped up in around 5 minutes. (Granted you are not me, but hey. I'm sure you can as well. I'm not even a fast typer.) This doesn't cut the cookie. Let's look at yer word count here.... Hm. 8 chaps, 4567 words. Not much right there. A typical chapter SHOULD be 1000 words long EACH. This means you had around 500 words per chap, give or take a few tens. Even if you have some DIFFICULTY with length (trust me, we all do sometimes), you should be able to create SOMETHING with a few 700 words AT LEAST.

Not that I don't want ya to stop, just keep these things IN MIND. And continue. Continue and improve. ^^

Author's Response: aww man i'm so sry!! i have this on ff so it's kinda done on there and i'm adding a cha a day, sry i have a bad thing of not knowing how to spell 2

Wow....^^ I think it's cute...Plz continue

Author's Response: thank u so much ^^ and i will try to update soon ^^