*thinks about it* I think that Super (Fleetway version) and Hyper Shadow would be sweet. I'm gonna draw it. *grins* Any who, Kryu seems a bit Mary-Sueish with the whole 'genius' thing. Just like our painfully awesome fox-boy, Tails. In fact, being related, correct me if I'm wrong, doesn't improve the chances of having two genius kids. I like his brash personality, though. That's okay. And, fix your paragraphing. No reader wants to read large paragraphs, they fear they may get lost along the way. You had some spelling errors like 'through'. Save for those issues, I think this is okay. Are you gonna do the Super form thing? I've waited forever for someone to try it. *grins* Either way, keep up the story. ^^

Author's Response: Well Takashi thxs for giving me hope for that drawing, but would you explain what you mean with "Mary-Sueish" because I dont get it

I like how you said 'positive criticism'. XD Finally, someone says that. Any who, your dialogue and thoughts were pretty weak. They didn't flow very well. An' this “Shadow come here and look at all the stars out there, see how pretty they are. *sigh* How I wish I could go out there and try to grab one of those stars for myself?” is a line where you could split the quotes and narrate her sighing. It would probably work better.
And you know that really long paragraph you did after the Amy intro section? Try some dialogue there. When you just hit us with what's happening, there's no real interest.
Tails coming to the conclusion of Sonic liking Shadow seems pretty far off. He's a naive kid. And Shadow admitting something like that is out of character. Him refusing Sonic like that because he wasn't as peace was creative, though. Takashi likes.
To wrap this up: You need slightly better flowing correspondence, less choppy scenes (add more detail), and work on keeping the characters in character. The first chapter had some nice length though. You did okay. Keep it up. ^^

Author's Response: Well thank you but my idea came from the base of out of character emotion, you know those "what if" moments came to me. Plus dont forget that Tails is smart even for naive people they do tend to pick up something more than others that is why he got the conclusion. And for the whole Maria thing, it was a way for me to portray the angiush of deciding between reveng or love. But thank you a lot for the review and I hope the next line of works (the next chapters) really are to your liking, like I said this is my first Sonadow fanfic and the first fanfic I have ever put in the internet