Holy smokes Batman, that was a lot of action!

I know you were worried about introducing characters but I thought you did a great job, especially on Sonic. If there is one image I would choose to represent Sonic, it would be him blissfully resting under a tree, waiting for a fight. Seeing as how this is how you introduced him, I thought it was great.

Your Captain Anderson is an interesting character too, with his ways of "influencing" his surroundings.

Overall, it was a nice second chapter and don't worry about your split story line. You handle it well.

PS: When you described Metal, at the "bony claws" part, I got the idea that the G.U.N murder could have been him. Hmmmmmm.

Author's Response: Thank you, thank you, I ever so appreciate it. But think about it, that was just an introduction, just wait until things really start moving. Yeah, I think I did pretty good. Took me a few revisions, but I'm glad that I got it right; thanks for the encouragement. Captain Anderson... Captain Anderson is by far my favorite; best; and deepest character I have. He's been a character of mine almost eight years now, so I've had time to flush him out. He's going to be a central character in the whole story, and he's carrying quite a few plot twists under his sleeves. If you want to get a good idea for his character, listen to 'Behind Blue Eyes, by Limp Biscuit' (http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=2Pp38SR1lMU), it's a perfect fit for him, through and through. (Plus it’s a good song.) Once again, thank you. I'm glad to be able to move forward. Now… for chapter three… Heheheahhahahaah!

Nice start! I liked your other, far less sonadow-ish story and this is good too. You have a very real way about your dialogue. Can't wait to see the second chapter.

PS: What is Agent 47 doing calling you? :P

Author's Response: You know who Agent 47 is... you are now my favorite reader at this point. The reason 47 was calling is that during my post, I was playing Hitman: Blood Money on the 360. (Fun) I plan on putting a reference to whatever game I'm playing in my chapters. See if you can spot em' all! You read G.U.N.'s Requiem? I'm surprised, that thing was yanked from the site within hours. (Made me mad.) I think this site needs to loosen up on what they consider sonadow (It was implied!) But anyway, I'm glad you enjoyed that, I've improved considerably since then, so you'll like this. Dialogue has always been my forte; it's the easiest part of writing for me. I really want to get on with the story and get into the action, that's where I really shine. It'll get better... and better and better and better... just wait... I game, and I write, that's it. If I'm not gaming, I'm writing, and vise-versa. If I didn't game, I could update like three times at day. But If I didn't game, my writing would be considerably worse. (I get a lot of inspiration through games.) Anyway, thank you for your thoughts. I hope you continue to read and review, I'll be watching. (P.S. I do enjoy your story, keep at it!)