for a vampire Lucus is rather ungraceful x]

I like the use of the word whilst, makes it seem like they're really old /o.o

Shadow had wings? Vampires have wings when did that happen x] just a personal thing srry, nice tousch though. nice detail, not over doing it. =] nice job
~Raven

YES!!!! Someone writes about an incubus!!!!! Thank you so much. You rock! ^^ I was writing a full-bred incubus sonadow, but I don't think I need to anymore. Any who, I'm impressed if this is yer first story. Nice ties between demonology and vampirism. The beginning was in present tense, though. You should keep a consistent tense. Save for that, this is fantastic! ^^