'Crossing her arms, she was too budy trying to not swear mentally.' Busy, I believe. '“AMY!” her mentor yelled in angsty' I don't know what that is.... "Anger", maybe, instead of "angsty"? 'phisical feature'. It's 'physical' feature. I know, an odd looking word, but the entire English language is full of oddities, I'm afraid. 'cherfully'. 'Cheerfully'. 'He was condamned....' Either 'damned' or 'condemned'. 'Silver followed Amy’s example while his worries melt away' Needs a period (like some other sentences do) and the melt is supposed to be in past tense. 'the cocka-hog beg the pink hedgehog with his eyes to let his hand go' Same here, beg is supposed to be in past tense. 'Hot blood dirtied the floor, his yellow irides shivered in horror and pain, he tried to speak again but no avail.' Irides, to my knowledges, is not a full word. It's the beginning of a word that means luminosity (once again, I think) so you meant "irises", which is the colored section of the eyes. 'He felt a hard noise, his body stopped to shake.' Nothing grammatically wrong with this sentence. I'd just like to point out that it sounds very odd. His body stopped in order to shake. I don't know about that one.... Try to avoid those controversial sentences. And, 'hard noise'. Try something better than that. Real shaky sentence right there.

I can't state all the errors I spotted because I have no time, but ignoring those, this chapter is fantastic. (Confusing in regards to the part where Silver possibly died, though, but still good.) And, no it's not too short. Look at my skimpy chapters. >_> That should make you feel better.

About writing in English.... It's odd for half the people on this site, I'll bet. It is for me. The grammar is beyond confusing. A senile whale must have created the laws. Any who, fantastic job. I still like the plot. ^^

Author's Response: *Watches all the horrors she wrote* Someone kills me... This is the kind of help I need. I suck terribly at English. I'm going to re-write the grammatical horrors, though I can't do anything now for the controverial sentences: this is my writing style... An Italian style! >.> Italian and English don't fit with each other, and I'm still too young (and too stupid) to really think in English. About Silver's part, I have to admit I tried to make it confused on purpose. All I wrote is supposed to happen in less than 5-10 seconds. And is supposed to be in Silver's point of view. Thank you very much for the help and review ^^ I'm glad you liked the plot so far.

nice story, i think you shoude make more chapters there so many things that can happen like sonic haveing to protect shadow from amy or sonic becomes a paladin and shadz wont like it or something but it shoude be a few years later because 5 year olds?

Author's Response: Uhm, 5 years old? Do you think that Sonic is currently 5 years old maybe? If this is your thought I'm sorry, I messed up the story >.< Sonic is 15 in the fanfic, but ten years before those events his sister had begun her training.