That was so cute. ^o^ Good job!!!!!!!!!! Oh, and I loved it, I read it who knows how many times. Even if it was short, it was very lovely anyway!

very very very short

Author's Response: indeed. See definition of 'Drabble' in the response to the first review of this story. Although technically speaking, Drabbles are supposed to be 100 words exactly, so this thing is actually too LONG.

very nice! I like it! It does remind me of that movie!

This reminds me of an old folk tale my mother used to tell me before I went to bed... from the time I was born right up until I was thirteen years old. It's so cute! Don't quite get it though... Did you spell chocolate wrong on purpose? Anyway, I like this! it's cute! I'm gonna read it to my daughter until she turns thirteen... like my mother did to me! X3

No, I didn't like it. And I only review to tell you that I have no idea what the fuck just happened. I think you attempted to give a summary, but gave away to whole story, and no, just no more "chappie." You are not at the level of the other authors to use that reserved word yet. Instead, try taking this down, making a REAL first chapter (it would start with the chocolatier, and how there is a void in his life that his sweets were simply not feeling). In the next chapter, introduce the dilemma, or problem, that the chocolatier not only obsesses over his miscue, but even more so of the mariner himself. The next chapter can delve either into the psyche of the obsession or the desire of the river boater for that one true love. In the next chapter, you have them meet (perhaps using their individual drives to have them meet in chance). With the next chapter, have them make sweet, sweet (pun intended) love, perhaps involving some kinky strawberry banana with oozes of chocolate syrup. (

Author's Response: I would agree with just about anything...escept that it's a drabble. I do think I'm at the level to know how to build a story, and this isn't one. Meaning, no next chapter. Instead, I'm working on the next chapter of my cinderella sonadow adapt, which IS a real story instead of a drabble - but if you would want to adapt chocolat in the way you planned to in your review, I'd probably check it out.

Author's Response: I would agree with just about anything...escept that it's a drabble. I do think I'm at the level to know how to build a story, and this isn't one. Meaning, no next chapter. Instead, I'm working on the next chapter of my cinderella sonadow adapt, which IS a real story instead of a drabble - but if you would want to adapt chocolat in the way you planned to in your review, I'd probably check it out. Definition of Drabble from ever-faithful wikipedia: "The purpose of the drabble is brevity and to test the author's ability to express interesting and meaningful ideas in an extremely confined space."