This makes me want to take this story down, but, unfortunately, you broke no rules. Almost wish you did so I could click the magical "Delete" button on the Admin options. God.

Use quotations, please. Spell things correctly. If you are underage, please get off this site. Underage people who can't write need to go to school to learn how to write better. The rest of us tutor ourselves with literature and advice. If you are dyslexic or something, please get a betareader to help you. I know it's hard to for dyslexic people, but for God's sake, I know a lady who's dyslexic who reads all the time. It's not impossible to overcome it.

You realize you can't even spell your own character's name, right? "Nemi", "Nemmy", "Nemy"...pick one, God damn it! And what the hell? A sex scene randomly placed in that had no feeling, nothing. The delete button is calling for you....

So, clean this up. I suggest getting a Goddamn betareader. You depress me. I hope you have a nice day with this knowledge.