Oh crap! Is he...from that...no way^.^ Want more! *whine*
Holy s**t someone finally made Shads a half woman and a Uke. I kinda think his personality makes him more of a Seme but this is interesting.
!!!!!!!WHERE'S THE REST!!!!!!!
good story though
is shadow...pregnant...with sonic's...baby?
im soo excited
XD
please!! continue it, this is just awesome!!
Shadow? With a womb? Woah didn't see that ocming at all. I thought he was an alcoholic which caused his problems. Now this seems interesting. Although Gerald telling Maria about Shadow having a womb was a bit disturbing. She was a little girl after all (I think, it's hard to tell).
Author's Response: Maria was said to be between the ages of 12 and 14 when she was murdered, but I think Maria would understand with anything Gerald told him about..
I still like where this is going :3
Wonder how Sonic's going to react, if he knew what he was doing the whole time or realizing what the hell happened.
ANYWAY, this chapter was a bit better than the 1st. A bit short though? maybe because i'm mobile with nothing to do? :o
heh, well, you had a redundant section in there for a second.
and that's all I have to say so far. Uh. oh, Welcome to Sonadow :) (You're new right :/ )
AND, keep it up, and yeah. I await the next chapter :D
Author's Response: I'm sorry. DX My chapters are usually pretty short...I'd never get any story done otherwise.. Yeah, I'm new.
I like the idea you have goin' on here but I think that's all I like :o
Ur smex was choppy and...uh....awkward to read.
As for your characterization and all that jazz, I dunno....I think Sonic is good, if not l, spot on. Shadow on the other hand, I guess I just pegged him to be able to hold his drinks or refuse them all together.
Bah, anyway, um, if the story gets BETTER I await the next chapter!! :)
Author's Response: Well, thanks. Apologies for the choppiness(sp? Is it even a word? O.o). I'm just going with what my friend writes when I'm doing erotic RPs through Yahoo. ^^; Wow, I thought it was the other way around for characterization, myself. XD Thanks for the crit, I hope it ends up getting better for you. ^^;
I've seen this on deviantart as well. In my opinion, as long as the sex starts the plot development, you're granted immunity. If I recall, this story does in a..most interesting way. XD A good story, in my opinion. You're intro was perfect. But I notice a problem: the sex was unrealistic and poorly described. Described as well as a certain somebody on this site does. *cough* Me. *cough* You also have a slight choppy feel to it. Other than that, great job. ^^ Can't wait to see the rest posted.
Author's Response: Well, look at the reply to the reveiw above for my explanation/excuse for the sex scene. XD;; I'm glad you liked it though! ^_^
Oh, yeah, I've seen this on Deviantart before. It's a really great story! I hope it continues! ^^
Author's Response: Thanks. ^^ The story is kind of on a hiatus right now, and that's one of the reasons I haven't put up all the chapters in one setting. Yeah, you'll also have to come here if you wanna read it, because some jerk on DA reported it. >_>
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