I take it, from the summary, that this will have at least mild humor. That compels me to read on. So far so good. A little bit of overuse with the word "hard," but overall, well done. Can't wait to see how you go about this story. ^^

Author's Response: Hopefully I will be able to insert some humor, here and there ^^ That was my first lemon I wrote, and to be honest, I really find it hard to write erotic things, so I'll know not to overuse any words if I do write something like that again. I hope you keep up with the story, and thanks for the feedback ^^