I'm glad you can capitalize. Don't abuse that great power anymore. You capitalized the word 'chin' but you can't do that for the characters? hm...well...okay..
Follow your own story, Shadow never took his gloves or shoes off, remember?
Anywho. Wow....I think their...mmm...relationship developed rather quickly. Other then that....good story, loooooooove it :3 (and get a BETA!)
Author's Response: If I may quote my self “He barely had time to pull off his gloves, kick off his rocket skates, and pull the duck down duvet over himself, before he was asleep." HA HA I did follow my own story tank you
Okay, I was going to comment on both chapters in a chap. 2 comment. BUT, I gotta do this now.
One word-Beta...get one and get one fast because this story has too much potential to be dragged down by poor spelling and grammar.
'Mane room' ....okay, I just pictured a lare room full of male lions.
When you use military time and standard civillian time, you don't really have to note the difference, considering common sense will help people figure it out. If not...oh well? :)
Anyway! Great minds think alike? I had an idea for a story like this months ago when the game came out but I was never sure where to start. So thanks for doing this!! :o
And yeah, all the bad spelling and grammar aside. Love where this is going and now i'm going to chapter...2...3....three XD
Author's Response: I know I did my best but I will see what I can do. In the past I have got my bff to edit but she has so many other commitments and the attention span of a rabbit. also about the chapters I meant to have a different chap 1 but I started with two and realised I didn’t need it.
Good start, but this needs a LOT of work. Lots of run on sentances, poor grammar, and several spelling mistakes. You might want someone to proofread this before you post another chapter.
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