Heh...
Author's Response: ...okay?
Heh... A jalapeño is not hot at all. Amy must have been very calm. xD
I like this.
Well, either Sonic was exaggerating or June turned to December in less than fifteen minutes. xD
Author's Response: Well, glad to see that you do. I actually don't remember writing about a jalapeno though or the June thing. I'll look into it. Thanks for reviewing and glad that you like it. Next chapter will be much more enticing if I get it right.
Shadow discovered the incident on July 24. Interesting how you give a date... Even more interesting that it is the day before my birthday...
This is interesting... Why is Sonic unable to run his usual speed of sound? Why are they so scared? They should be able to escape easily... I am sure that it will be explained later...
Author's Response: Day before your birthday... that's interesting indeed. There actually is a reason. I'm sorry the story sounds somewhat cheezy right now I noticed I've made a couple errors but i assure you that the next part and those that follow will really get better.
Nicely written. I love the way you put Shadow and Sonic's relationship. It's cute, but it could get a bit deeper towards the end, don't you think?
Author's Response: of course and it will and I thank you so much for reviewing. I was waiting for someone to finally say something. *DOUBLE STAMP* APPROVED!
Awesome sauce. I love your writing, as per usual. And I completely cracked up with Shadow and his "desperation." The part with them holding hands was a riot. He truly is clueless, especially when he forgets his line. XD And them fighting at the end works fairly well due to their butting personalities. I can't wait to see the transition into the darker themes. This shall be interesting. On a side note, one or two wordings were kinda out of place. "Soften his tails" and "clarify that no one was listening." But, I can't wait to see what you dish out next. This rocks more than just socks, buddy.
Author's Response: and i thought i was gonna be criticized and mocked, and beatened, and slaughtered, and tortured, and... and... I get this??? I'm not dead?! YAY! *stamps your forhead* HAHA YOU'RE APPROVED!
Looks good so far. And I really had to laugh at the part where Shadow forgot his lines. :D
By the way, IC means "in-character", meaning you got their personalities down excellently.
Keep this up!
Author's Response: it was extremely hard to keep. It hurt my head and my muses abandoned me! Thankyou! *stamped* APPROVED!
Omg i reviewed :O
Author's Response: yes, you did
:P
Tails is like :O
Author's Response: haha. I agree. *stamped* APPROVED!
"Reviewing never killed anyone." That brought a good laugh.
The end was well done with dialogue. "I just can't see you as relationship kinda guy you know?" "Neither do you..." Sonic's answer is truly intriguing to me. You managed to not make him angry or try to hump Shadow into a couch. Him being incredulous but in a light hearted way is definitely IC. Something tells me Sonic doesn't want to hurt his friend, but the idea of a relationship also...doesn't bode well with him, ya know? That's the message I received. Well done. Loved the beginning. Keep it up. ^^
Author's Response: thanks! but what's IC? *stamps*APPROVED
Omgomgomg keep going
Author's Response: i don't know if i'm even going to finish this. It's just an introduction to my new writing skills. But okay.
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