My face throughout the Sonblaze (is that right?) was this:@_#
when Sonadow came it turned to this: :D
But i love it very descriptive
that part about "Blaze" Quils, me likes.
Author's Response: Yeah, i know about the son/blaze ^^; I just put it in theere to show that Sonic likes girls and that shadow is (possibly) An exception. I just got too into writing it...
lol your story is great and funny write the next chapter soon plz
im liking this story so far
i feel sorry for Tails
that reminds me...........you actually go on deviantART....i go on there and read stories about virtually whatever i feel like....except things that are put in mature content...THANKS TO THE FACT MY COMPUTER IS A MOTHER FUCKING PIECE OF FUCKING SHIT.
you people think you put a lot of bad words in stories...fuck i say bad words all the time and sometimes it gets me into a whole lotta shit...like when i told someone to go fuck themselves i got a fucking black eye....TWICE.
I have never seen a Story that swears this much...but the description looks awesome and the story looks awesome so type on!
OK the one thing that bothered me was the swearing, but it was pretty good. I don't usually cuss unless when I'm either hurt or angry so it's a bit uncommon for me. But I also love comedy, and awkward moments.
"“Please tell me that you are NOT going to sit there wanking off to yiff porn all night, instead of coming to my place and getting some real action?”
As Shadow walks out of the bathroom, drying himself with a towel, he raises his eyebrow.
“Who are you talking to?”
I cover the mouth piece.
“Tails.”"
Now that was just funny. I think this can turn out to be quite entertaining.
Author's Response: Thankyou very much ^^ I already know that I use swearing too much, and that there plenty of other things I could use instead of 'swear words' But it is just breaking the mould, Y'know? But thanks for pointing it out! And thanks for the kind review!
I don't know why I like it. Hmm.
Well. While the writing isn't very.. eh.. elaborate, I guess you could say.. The story itself, seems to be good. The dialogue is very nice, as someone else said. I look forward to more. Usually I wouldn't pay attention to something so short in length, but I suppose if you could.. you know.. post more for me, I might excuse it just this once. ;3
hehehe
Author's Response: Thanks for the review. I do try to make my chapters longer, I just fail... I will try harder to write in a larger quantity next chapter.
Heeheee nice story keep goingp
Author's Response: Cheers :P
A bit of grammar clean up would be fine, but I simply adored the dialogue. Tails was a riot. Shadow's personality was just as anti-social as we all would expect of the jerk. Ending went well, too. Good last line. It really gives an image to me about how these two aren't the best of comrades and hate putting up with each other (yet they do) as it is also illustrated in the juice scene. An interesting play on a typical "party story" and I really like it thus far. ^^
Author's Response: Thanks for the review, (As always) Thanks for the heads up on the grammar, I will try to clean it up. I wanted to do a funnier more light-hearted piece, and i decided to do a 'Party Story' seeing as nearly everybody seems to do one at one point, but I will try to avoid any clichés. Thanks again for the review! ^^
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