wow! amazing, i've never read something so great, so original. You really are such an awesome, totally cool writter!!!
Author's Response: Wow, thank-you! ^^
'Outwardly, he seemed the same as ever, but on the inside, he was dead.' Original and in character. I can see Sonic acting the same as ever, but feeling the loss. You don't portray him as a depressed freak after Shadow's supposed demise. Well done. You receive bonus points on my chart. He manages his emotions very well around others in this, as he does in the games, but you pull off that last bit with the excuse of how deeply and truly in love he is with Shadow. That makes it believable.
One typo in the 26th paragraph (forgot to add an "e" to "be," no biggie), but other than that it was almost perfect. I'm putting this in my favorites for its sheer genius. Well done! ^^
Author's Response: Thanks so much for the fav! *glomps again* I'm trying to portray Sonic as game-like as possible whilst keeping him completely in love.
Your characters are beyond spot on--they're better than how they're portrayed in the games. Shadow's long list of insults was pure genius. It makes me notice that his array of vocabulary complements Sonic's lack thereof in a most wonderful fashion.
There is nothing wrong with this chapter as far as I can see. You have a forte of characterization and incorporating droll wit into narrative and dialogue. I tip my hat to you. Great job! ^^
Author's Response: Oh wow! Thanks! *glomps* I imagined Shaodw realying every word in his vocabulary off to Sonic who would just lap it up. Thanks so much for reviewing - reviews make me very happy! ^^
Aw the fluff is so cute! I love this story! I'm a fan of comedy but I also like fluff. Especially when they have the loving nature ot them.
Author's Response: Fluffness! ^^
I don't think I've ever seen a story where Sonic turns to the Black Arms. Interesting. It definatly proves that he'd give up everything for Shadow doesn't it?
Author's Response: It is being kept up as we speak. I'm getting too into this fic - back out, quickly! ^^
Very good! I really like stories where Sonic sides with the Black Arms (willingly or not). Please keep this up!
Author's Response: Sonic has sided - for now. Poor lovestruck Sonic and highly unimpressed Shaodw! Thanks for reviewing. ^^
First of all, genius. Second, you have sent to us a side of Sonic not many have portrayed. You make me perceive that he is desperate for Shadow's love, to the point of leading a campaign of global genocide, yet you also leave so much of the thought up to the reader at the same time.
I love the first line of the second to last paragraph. Original way of description. One a side note, I believe that the word "no-one" is spelled as two separate words like "no one." Any who, absolutely brilliant. I've always wanted to read about Sonic siding with Black Doom and you've pulled an ace on that. Can't wait to see what happens next. ^^
Author's Response: Sory I haven't been able to respond for a while. But - thanks! I wanted to make this fic so you could sympathise with the both of them; each have their own reasons for doing what they do and for the life of me I don't want to keep it as a two-shot anymore. I might expand. ^^ Haven't decided.
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