i think u did pretty good, better then anythin id do
Alright, in the very first line, pick a gray. You have both. Pick one. You have fairly good rhymes here, but from a cursory glance it is clear that you have not done poetry before. After all, the two lines in every stanza that rhyme to not carry the same number of syllables. *shurgs* Not that it really matters, as this is a good poem for one's first attempt at long poetry, and isn't a bad poem in the first place.
I loved the change of tone throughout the Poem. It was great. Thanks for the literature! ~Miles Prower~
interesting.......is.all.i.can.say
Aww! How fluffy! i absolutely LOVE fluffiness! good job on rhyming too, i'm awful at rhyming
Awww it's so beutiful!!! That was a great poem.
simply.....
outstanding......
AWESOME! You're even better than me!
I love it! I'm not a poet, nor do I know much about poetry, but of course, I can tell a good poemm from a bad one. And this is a great poem.
Author's Response: Thanks! ^_^
Cuteness! Very, very well done; some poetry comes out really strange but this is exquisite and emotional. Love it! ^^
Author's Response: Aw, thanks. Glad you liked it!
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