It was cool! can't wait 4 the next one! Although I've liked more the other chapters but this is cool.

Author's Response: Eh, I just thought that it would be a good idea to put in some kind of background chapter... And it sorta furthers the relationship between Shadow and Sonic. There will be some more story next chapter though, maybe. Thanks for the review!

Yeah I did over MSN... oh well apology accepted. Thanks.

Author's Response: Thanks, and sorry again... If you felt hurt by it, that's at least a good indication that I did good... Right? That may have come out wrong... Oh well...

w....t.....f? O.o

Author's Response: I could say the same thing about this review. It's pointless. WHAT DO ARE YOU EXPRESSING SHOCK OR CONFUSION AT?

Chapter 1: Meh...seen this before. Language is a little week. Nicely common in some places, a little weak in others. Character voice is strong, determined. I enjoy the initial portrayal of Shadow. 7/10
Chapter 2: Diction greatly improves. Occasionally, I feel as though I am shifting through some poetic novelette. *gulp* 8/10... *it hurts to give positive reviews.
Chapter 3: Eh... all too obvious dream sequence...followed by a reaction from Sonic that doesn't make sense... it's too simplistic and lacks an increase of entropy one would expect. A decent curve ball, but by far your weakest chapter. The only real merit is the pseudo-rape scene had a nice change of tone. Otherwise, it severely lacks. 4/10

Chapter 4: I feel as though you really missed a chance to delve into Sonic's thoughts and mindset. I also find his reactions to be unbelievably shallow and unfleshed out. He isn't shifting through memories, coming to grips with anything... it's just one stale Sonic and one stale Shadow. I realize that Shadow should be stale, but Sonic? There is so much to explain and so many thoughts and reactions he should be doing. For one (and I could have missed it), why did he not try to escape? He still didn't trust his master no matter how nice he is. Also, why did he not suspect his master wanted the collar just to ensure he didn't escape? Sure, he felt "insulted," but simply hinting at his feelings cuts out paragraphs of interesting details and thought processes... I feel a bit must be fleshed out of these characters or this story (in spite of your usually poetic style) is going to rot with stagnation and poor diction. I've had it happen, and even if you continue to gain interest, it will simply be a fad and not memorable in the long run. (5/10)

That gives you a grand total of:
24/40=6/10

Author's Response: Woah, massive review! Anyway, thanks for all of that. Guess the earlier chapters were better, hmm? I'll try to get back to what made them good, though getting a perfect review from you is slightly harder than going back and preventing the Kennedy assassination ^_^ Hell, I may just put in a whole chapter to cover Sonic's thoughts. Again, thanks.

I like this chapter - and the buying him a new collar was very cute. I love how Shadow is so careful around Sonic, trying to get him to trust him.

And as for Turn Back the Clock...it's your decision, but if it were up to me I would tie you to the computer and force you to finish it. It's as you said, a lovely concept and it should definately be continued.

Author's Response: Yeah... I guess I've just lost interest in it for the moment. Maybe if I go read through it I'll get some motivation... Anyway, thanks.