I really enjoyed this story so far, wether it was another slave fic or not. Its also quite unique in the fact that both Sonic and Shadow are slaves. Most make shadow a Lord or Master or something. Your description of sonics feelings and the mood your creating, brilliant writing.
It really is going wonderfully so far. I hope there will be an update soon, im dying to know if Shadow gets there in time. =)
Author's Response: Glad you like it! I will update as soon as I can.
Right now my mind is totally blank. I have read this twice through, and need to read it again. You have definately improved in this chapter. I hope to see more ^_^
Author's Response: Thanks, I'm glad you like it!
I'm at a loss for words right now. Well done!
Author's Response: Thank-you! ^^
First of all, great beginning. A very good start, it's fast and pulls you in. It certainly is a different take on the slave situation (seeing as how most people make Shadow the master and Sonic the slave or vise versa.)
The comment about the insults "bouncing off harmlessly" was a winner. A real five-star work of metaphor. Heck, most lines were very deep. I could probably ramble about half of the sentences and still not properly explain how much I enjoy this work of art. You make their inner voices sound like actual thoughts of a person and it adds a lot to the piece. And the repetition at the end. That's witty.
I have no suggestions save for maybe two editing errors, but that's basically nothing. This is a brilliant story (very original!) and I wonder just how you'll forward this. It's poetic and raw at the same time. So, I guess what I just prattled on about is that you are awesome and I love this thing. Great job.
Author's Response: Wow, I'm glad you like it so much! ^^ Not all chapter will have so much inner stuff, but in every chapter there will be some italics to amke me feel poetic about inner...ness. But still, thanks, and for this, I will maybe update sooner!
Wow. :o That's amazing, i hope there's gonna be more soon. <3 ^-^
Author's Response: There will be, don't worry!
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I have nothing to say. This is just epic. You've done an amazing job here. Even with barely any dialouge, you've succeeded with some of the most believeable, stunning portrayals of Shadow and Sonic I've ever seen. Very original idea, having them both be slaves. God, I hope Shadow gets to Sonic in time... And Tails too, I guess ^_^
I swear, if you don't continue this, I will actually kill you.
Author's Response: O_o...fookin' hell! Glad you like it, I guess! ^^ Wow, and coming from a writer like you...I'm a happy bunny! I will continue!
.... OOOO.. Very good. Please finish? Please? This is REALY good.
Author's Response: Thanks! I will endavour to continue!
Ooo... I want to know what happens to us next.
Author's Response: Weeeeell...flashbacks first, dotted in and around. I hope you like it!
... As much as I thought this was going to be (in your terms), "Another Slave fic..."
I enjoyed it.
Author's Response: I'm glad you did! I earnt MASilvers approval! *pats self on the back* Must do more and better!
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