In terms of how it is written, well done indeed. The sentences flow well and aren't unbearably choppy or repetitive like you sometimes get in smut-only fics. A few spelling errors, but nothing major. For the first fic to be uploaded, it isn't bad at all.

However, it irks a little that this is just a smut fic. PWPs kind of get boring after a while. We could have had maybe just a bit of plot? Maybe some background information, finding out how they came to be in this relationship and whatnot? And yes I know, you asked to be humoured in terms of them wearing clothes. I would; but if you have clothed fics then we should have a background reason (doesn't have to be exact, it can be vague) suggesting why.

A reasonable fic, but a little 2D for me. I actually look forward to seeing what you'll do armed with a plot. Write again soon!

Author's Response:

Thanks so much for the contrustive critisism. I wrote this story about 2 and a half or 3 years ago and I have thought of re-writing it. I just wanted to get something posted here since my account hasn't been active since I made it.

I really like your idea about giving a back story instead of just having the smut part that I wrote. When I re-write it soon I will definately add a back story to it. It may be a first chapter and then this will be the second.

Thanks again for the advice. :-)