THAT WAS FAST RESPONSE.
Well, let me give a short review.
I feel sorry for Shadow, he must be confused and starting to become afraid. Everything he believed about his own abilities are now falling apart. I really like it.
Author's Response:I have e-mail notifications enabled. XD
Thanks! I think that's where this is going; the effects of the loss of power on someone who always relied on it...
*Has no idea what she's writing*
This is very wierd... Huh...
Author's Response:Thanks, I guess? ^^;
Ohhhhhhhhhhh maaa gaahhd. This is so good! I am dying of intrigue! Please continue!
Author's Response:Thank you! I'll do my best! :)
Ahem...
Well, I think you mentioned that you wanted someone to write the rest with you, so... I can help :).
This is really good, sorry I didn't review earlier.
Author's Response:Oh! I guess I didn't phrase that correctly; I meant that I wasn't sure whether to continue, and wanted help deciding. Thanks for the offer, though
And I'm glad you like it. :)
Aww, thanks! :D Heh, I like it! I thought it was quite the clever idea to start in the middle of a creepy situation and explain the backstory later. I was just busy discussing with Skyblaze who the mystery culprit may be - I think it's Mephiles, or some variation thereof. :P Despite the fact that I really, *really* can#t take angst or torture or general powerlessness of a strong characters, yes, I do want to see more. VERY powerful atmosphere here^^
Author's Response:The super-authors are talking about my story? What is this madness?! *Runs around in confusion*
Unfortunately, things aren't going to get happier any time soon, so it may not be pleasant reading. But I'm glad it's sounding the way I'd intended. :)
Mephiles..?
At first I thought it was Black Doom, but Mephiles fits much better. It's an intriguing opening, certainly. Dark and spooky. Shadow's barely-contained fear is excellently drawn.
I'd very much like to see this continued. Feel free to poke me if you want someone to bounce ideas off.
Author's Response:An entirely valid theory!
I'm glad it's looking dark so far, since that's normally not how I write. XD
And thanks for the idea-bouncing offer! I may just take you up on it... If you don't mind having any surprises ruined. *Laughs*
I'm obsessively in love with your writing. You do a spectacular job on creating a scene while leaving some imagination to the reader. Your word choices are beyond epic and I never feel like the work is repetitive.
I'd be quite intrigued with a full-fledge story, due to the air of mystery it leaves. As like the first reviewer, I was on the same mind set of Black Arms... Then, it was changed drastically.
I do hope you write more as well as to your other stories! I will anxiously wait for your updates. ;) You've done a lovely job!
Author's Response:Flattery will get you... more fanfiction, probably. *Turns red, fans self*
As I told the other reviewer, it's not the Black Arms. Feel free to make more theories, though; it's fun to hear what this sounds like to everyone else!
And thank you! :D
Very intriging. I admire the pure detail you put into every sentence to depict exactly what Shadow is experiencing, particularly in the beginning paragraphs. It just... draws you in, somehow. Also, I couldn't find a single grammerical flaw. Nice job.
Anyway, speculation time! As that mysterious voice came up and when Shadow suddenly recalled his and Rouge's assignment, I started thinking it was Black Doom and his army. Now... I'm not quite sure who (or what) is screwing around with Shadow ever since the whole "fang" business introduced itself. Hm... a long lost clone gone wrong? Future rape scene, please? Damn cliffhangers! XO
I had to chuckle at that remark about Shad's relatively random thought of Sonic. XD Good stuff.
As for you turning this little fic into a full-fledged story, PLEASE DO! Leaving it at a cliffhanger would be cruel! D:
Author's Response:I confess to being a spelling and grammar fanatic. If there were any left here, I'd attack them with all the powers of my delete and backspace keys as soon as they were pointed out.
Haha, I hadn't thought of it sounding like Black Doom and the gang! I suppose that means I need to admit that it's not them, so... it's something else!
And we had to throw Sonic in there somewhere. This is Sonadow, after all! XD
Writing the whole thing seems to be the general consensus I've been getting... But even if I do, you won't be finding out what happened here for a while. *Is only moderately cruel*
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