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Name: Mystyc Cheez (Signed) · Date: February 12, 2011 8:31 AM · For: Chapter 7 - Confrontation
Yay, Shadow is back! No, Shadow must explain! Yay, they have the emeralds! No, Eggman didn't get killed!

Author's Response:

Eggman really did deserave worse, but the story isn't quite finished yet. Perhaps he'll get what's comming to him, or maybe not, who knows?



Name: SonicFreeColors1234 (Signed) · Date: February 05, 2011 3:37 PM · For: Chapter 6 - An Unwelcome Surprise

When Is The Next One Coming out? Please continue Chapter To Chapter quickly! Your chapters are addicting!



Author's Response: :D glad you think so! One a week is about as fast as I can go unfortunately, don't get much time to write during the week.


Name: Mystyc Cheez (Signed) · Date: February 05, 2011 11:33 AM · For: Chapter 6 - An Unwelcome Surprise
UGH!!!! If it were possible, I'd jump into this story and strangle Eggman to death! D:<
Good job though :)

Author's Response: I know right! He definitely deserves it.


Name: SonicFreeColors1234 (Signed) · Date: February 02, 2011 4:45 PM · For: Chapter 5 - Lunch, Theft, and Acceptance

Please Continue!!!!!



Author's Response: No worries, I've already started the next chapter. Should be up by Saturday. Thanks for the encouragement and rating. I always appreciate a review!


Name: Mystyc Cheez (Signed) · Date: January 30, 2011 6:27 AM · For: Chapter 5 - Lunch, Theft, and Acceptance
Eggman will die! Sonic will kill him!
Good chapter.

Author's Response:

Thanks for the review! Dr. Eggman definitley desearves a good beating, but something tells me Sonic's going to have other problems to worry about.

And that's all I'm saying!



Name: bubblegirls (Signed) · Date: January 22, 2011 12:53 AM · For: Chapter 4 - Breakfast, Rage, and Mystery

i realy love this story plz make more it is so good i love what shadow did because i hate amy she is such a pain in the ass



Author's Response:

And you are now my new favorite person! Haha, thanks for the encoraging review. And now worries, there will be more. I'd say at the lastest I should have the next chapter up by next friday/saturday.



Name: Fade (Signed) · Date: January 16, 2011 5:38 PM · For: Chapter 1 - A Revelation

I find the formatting extremely hard to read; the first paragraph of the first chapter was so full of dialogue, I couldn't tell who was saying what.  :(

Most stories are written with a separate line for each character speaking.  If you space things out a bit, it will be much easier for us to read, and we can get into the story faster!



Author's Response:

Alrighty, no prob. I'll work on re-organizing this and hopefully have it done by tomorrow. Thanks for feedback!



Name: Shadow (Signed) · Date: January 15, 2011 10:07 PM · For: Chapter 1 - A Revelation
Changing POVs midchapter is usually a big NONO for writers. It breaks up the flow of the story and comes out awkward and clunky. Try to stick to writing from a 3rd person view if you want to tell the story from the view of more than one person.

Author's Response:

Agreed, I kept away from that in the second chapter, and you're right, it has a much better flow. I'm actually thinking about editing the first chapter so it's more like the second. 



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